Memo to Ms. Moody

To: Ms. Moody
From: Lindsey Pratt
Date: Wednesday September 16th, 2009
RE: Memo Assignment

The feedback I was given was very helpful. I am going to listen to what advice I was given, mainly in connecting the story completely. So far I have yet to make a real point, and to connect the ideas I have presented cohesively. I need to include dialogue as well. I need to look through my first paragraphs and be sure I have enough variance between sentence structures. I do not believe I have yet to perfect the flow of my writing yet either. My peer reader believed my theme seemed to be heading to a story of my love of science, which isn’t my point at all. I will have to work to make my real theme apparent.

My biggest challenge for finishing my memoir is smoothing out my vision into one understandable story. I can visualize in my head how I want the story to read, but it will be a challenge making all my ideas come across clearly in my paper. My story is going to continue on to tell of one morning where, playing in the dirt, I was covered in ants. I ran to my dad for help, but knocked all the ants off in the process. The insightful significance (my true point) of this memory is that this was the first time I realized that every solution is not black and white. There are solutions in the grey areas too.